The Exit Exam
Spring 2005 AnchorSet, 4-4 Essay
Topic: A place people would enjoy or regret visiting
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There are many places in the world that people could visit on their vacation, whether it is during summertime or winter holidays. Each one of them has something interesting and entertaining to offer while attracting the public. One of these places is the state of Florida. This beautiful and full of sunshine state has been one of the most visited places in the world for many years. It attracts tourists from all over the globe because of the variety of attractions it offers . The Walt Disney World parks in the Orlando area are the biggest reasons why Florida is so popular. The incredible beaches all along the coast of the state are great places where people can spend quality time. Also, the night life in some cities in this state can make a long-lasting impression on the tourists. Florida is one of the most enjoyable places in the world.
Walt Disney World parks, along with Universal Studios and Epcot Center are the most popular tourists attractions in the world. They are the biggest reason why Florida is a great place to visit. The parks are filled up with thousands of people every day and that proves they are worth visiting. They guarantee a fun time to anybody, no matter of their age or race. Magic Kingdom is the best park for children because most of the rides and activities are designed especially for them. Also, the employees dressed as the characters from Disney movies walk around the park, which makes kids very happy. Parks, such as Universal Studios or Epcot are fun for kids as well as adults because they offer entertainment for people of all ages. They give youngsters and elders the opportunity to have a great time.
Another reason why people would definitely enjoy visiting Florida is because of the beaches it has. Florida is known as the sunshine state because of the beautiful, sunny weather all year long. The best way to spend time when the sun is shining hard and the rain is absent is at the beach. Beaches all along the coast of Florida, such as in Daytona, Cocoa or Clearwater are the places to be, swimming in the ocean or playing sports like beach volleyball. Some might even take advantage of going boating or scuba diving. There is always something entertaining to do at the Florida beaches.
Last but definitely not least enjoyable experience can be guaranteed with the rich night life Florida offers. Cities, such as Orlando, Miami and Tampa have great spots that people can go to have fun. Miami is one of the most popular places for having the best night clubs in the United States. It is the place where the adult public can forget about their daily problems and have a wild time. Anyone, over 21 years of age can find a night club or a bar there that they will never forget because of the amount of fun they had.
In conclusion, Florida has a lot to offer to its visitors. It is a place filled with fun, relaxation and sunshine. The attraction parks, beaches and night clubs are only a part of what makes Florida such a great state. It is the best place to spend a vacation at and never regret visiting.
Comments:
Grade: 4/4
Word count: 544
Analysis: This essay offers a rather broad thesis (Florida is enjoyable), but the organizational development follows a standard five paragraph design closely, so development is good. Supporting details are good and give a clear indication that the writer is knowledgeable about the topic, but there are few specifics (specific rides, beaches, clubs).
The grammar and mechanics are strong, although there some awkwardness (the first sentence in paragraph five, notably) and a few punctuation errors. The only consistent error is the lack of commas before the third item in lists.