The Exit Exam

Summer 2004 AnchorSet, 3-3 Essay

Topic: A product that people would be better off without.This topic was not selected for the Summer 2004 exam.

A product or service that people would be better off without is alcohol. Alcohol is a very dangereus product that has no benifits at of it. Even though many businesses sell this product to make money it's very harmful, and needs to be removed from the United States. We would be better off without alcohol because it causes deaths, health problems, and is addictive.

One reason alcohol is unnecessary is because many deathes to people. It not only kills individuals, but also other people around them. Every year people die from alcohol related cases. For example, drinking and driving is among the popular cases. Kids as young as sixteen go out partying with thier friends and consume large amounts of alcohol, and then drive home. The kid who is driving gets into an accident kills himself and his other two friends in the car. This is all the cause of alcohol. This is why alcohol can be removed from products being sold.

Another reason wer are better off without alcohol is because it causes health problems. There has been scientific proof that by consuming enough alcohol you will have serious health problems. There are kids as young as sixteen drinking. That means that by the time there in thier thirty's they will have some type of alcohol related health problem. There have been many cases of the years of people dying of liver damage because of too much alcohol. There are other cases of people who have bad reactions from alcohol causing them to have heart attacks. Alcohol can cause high blood pressure, and other long term health problems. By getting rid of alcohol could help thousands of people to a healthy life. This is one product we would be better off without.

The last reason we can do without alcohol is because it's an addiction. People every year start to drink alcohol and never stop. People call it a drug because it is one. It's actually a depression drug because people drink alcohol when thier depressed. Alcohol is very hard to stop once you start doing it because it makes you feel so good when your on it. After the alcohol stops working you feel worse then you felt before so people drink more to give them that high again. After a few times it just becomes a dominos effect. No alcohol is good alcohol because it puts you in this depression loop that keeps you stuck in it for a long time. This is again another reason we are better off without alcohol.

In conclusion, there are many reason alcohol can be done without our lives. It's much safer out of our bodies, much healthier out of our bodies, and make us much happier out of our bodies. This is one product we would be better off without having in our lives.

Comments:

[ Score 3-3 (474w) This is a very traditional 3 scored essay. It is average. The sentence grammar good. There are some consistent spelling errors, phrasing problems. The sentence structure is very repetitious (There are...because....). A 3 essay is often not strong, but it is adequate.]